Part Three – Assignment 3: Reflection on tutor’s feedback and tutorial

Overall evaluation:

Today, after receiving a short and comprehensive formative feedback, I had a video tutorial with my tutor. My tutor annotated my essay with, as he described it, ‘provocative rather than critical’ comments and questions. The main point is ‘to raise competing ideas wherever possible to keep my thinking’ going. I am very glad for such thought-provoking input.

Not so much to clarify this time, discussing more some aspects of visual culture related to his annotation and today’s reality perception.

My essay was well perceived, with the following good points mentioned by my tutor:

  • Good overall evaluation ‘this is pretty good stuff…you have done really well.’
  • I am making my points in appropriate language and in a logical sequence
  • Good and thorough research with appropriate reference of authorities to  substantiate my assertions.
  • Coursework: My tutor acknowledged my enthusiasm and thoroughness as well as my development of understanding of underlying concepts.
  • Blog: Easy to navigate and containing what is expected at this stage.

Main points for me to pay attention to:

  • Some linguistic faults and proof reading.
  • UCA Harvard reference, to check possibly inconsistencies between OCA and new UCA Harvard reference guides. Especially, the aspect of page referencing: OCA guide shows ‘p.xx’, UCA guide shows ‘:xx’. Therefore, I will be coherent and apply from today on the colon format.

Suggested further reading in context of forthcoming assignment 4 (‘Difference-in-itself’):

Suggested further reading on contemporary understanding of truth and reality (related to Plato’s Cave), fiction as providing clarity:

  • Murakami, H. (2003). Hard Boiled Wonderland and the End of the World. London: Vintage

Discussion points in tutorial (beyond the scope of the essay):

  1. Plato as being too ascetic for our time? The question of entertainment as part of human life and human condition is perhaps too alienated for Plato. His life was perhaps too much engaged with being separeted from a life experienced by his fellow citizens. A gap that Plato himself critized in The Republic when he stated that the knowledgeable people who have seen the form of the sun and the form of the good need to return to the cave to live with the ‘prisoners’. Did Plato do the same in his life? In the same book he found the lower desires e.g. drama as rather ‘disgusting’ and something to overcome. This question does raise further question of authenticity if writer, artist and her/his works. One the one hand ‘practice what you preach’ and on the other hand to embrace life and to enjoy as fun things and popular culture.
  2. First black police officer in UK?
    I mentioned based on the information provided in Visual culture by Howell and Negreiros (2015) that mid 1980 there were no black police officer in service. In fact there was on since mid 1960s according to my tutor. Whether there was one or not is not the main point in my essay. The key question is whether the depicted reality in Sitcoms and Reality TV reflects an experienced reality in life of the audience or not. One or event a few do not make it up for being considered as mainstream or normal.
  3. Reality in TV and experienced reality, intelligence of general public versus ignorance?
    Related to some arguments in my essay, e.g social bots in social media pretending human responses, and quoting Plato’s description of the general public as ‘dreamers’ who cannot discern between ‘semblance and reality’.  I am wondering whether this question is the right question at all. I can see people behaving and reacting at times differently in life. One can enjoy ‘nonsense’ shows and be a critical person at other times. For me this is somehow related to the aspect of human psyche and conditions. As I argued in my essay, the social masks that one wears may conceal a true self (see C.G.Jung) and the social reality as such my appear un-real (see Lacan). I could see this discussion also leading towards an argument for representation of something to be represented, being present. Or towards an argument of ‘difference in itself’, i.e. both aspects are just different forms of actualizatio, to argue with Deleuze (more to come in assignment 4)

To do:

  • To check linguistic faults and UCA Harvard referencing.
  • Making some points clearer before assessment.
  • Reading as suggested by tutor and following his advice to consider for assignment 4 (with some research) all images presented before selecting one.
  • Assignment 4 doesn’t mention a word count limit. After discussion with my tutor I am planning to stay between 1000 and 1500 words (noticed that part 4 exercises tend to low word counts, A5 will have a 1000 words limit).
  • I am planning to move to the next level (HE5) soon. Apparently,  I need to receive my tutor’s feedback on the last assignment 5 before I can move on to next level (HE5), submission would not count. Thus, I need to move faster.

  2 comments for “Part Three – Assignment 3: Reflection on tutor’s feedback and tutorial

  1. October 2, 2017 at 4:11 pm

    well deserved – you blog and thinking is a model to me. I agree agree: good stuff!!!! I loved the Murakami book – it is actually much more a ‘page turner’ than some of his others – have fun!

    • Stefan
      October 2, 2017 at 4:23 pm

      Thanks Inger on my way to assignment 4 . Great to hear you like Murakami – have just downloaded as kindle. Will enjoy it .

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